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No Turning Back by ~Babe91:iconBabe91:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Spiritual > Fixed


There is no turning back in this world,
For what you have done,
You can't change a thing,
For you have not won,

You have failed,
You have lost,
Now all you could do is learn,
From a deadly cost,

Maybe you'll be smatter,
Maybe you'll make the same mistake,
But what ever you do,
Do not grab stake,

Now that you know,
That there is no turning back,
All you could do,
Is think about the fact.
©2005-2009 ~Babe91
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Author's Comments

This is true. There is no turning back for what you have done. I know one person whos going to make a rude comment on this poem. They almost always do on all of them. But who cares :D . I wish I could turn back. Do you?

:rose:Please Comment:rose:

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~NightRider91 May 15, 2005, 8:13:30 AM
i just remembered that i have to show that 1 poem to devin. lol. this is going to be funny
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~Babe91 May 15, 2005, 8:15:47 AM
Fine go ahead be my guest. I dont really care n-e more. You should have givin it to him along time ago because you gave me enough time not to care. It probley wont change ne thing. There are thing called "friendships". Oh yea i forgot. That is something you obvisly dont care about duh

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:rose:"I'll spread my wings and i'll learn how to fly, i'll do what it takes till I touch the sky,and i'll make a wish, take a chance, make a change,and brake away"- Kelly Clarkson:rose:
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~NightRider91 May 15, 2005, 8:17:17 AM
yup fuck "friendships"
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~Babe91 May 15, 2005, 8:18:37 AM
Typicall

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:rose:"I'll spread my wings and i'll learn how to fly, i'll do what it takes till I touch the sky,and i'll make a wish, take a chance, make a change,and brake away"- Kelly Clarkson:rose:
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~brucej May 16, 2005, 12:23:50 AM
its nice and short - to the point :)

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*draxx66 May 16, 2005, 5:23:45 AM
Nice poem, short and good. well done

Oh and what does 'smatter' mean. Or is that a typo? Lol
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~jaycech3n May 21, 2005, 1:06:58 AM
ah...someone invites an advanced critique...so here goes...

stanza 3
"Do not grab stake"
huh? mebbe i'm dumb, but what's this sposed to mean?

stanza 4
"Is think about the fact."
fact? what fact? did u mean "facts"?...colud've sounded better too....

otherwise itz good. keep it up...

i dont usually do things like dis, but u did ask for advanced crit...

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~Babe91 May 21, 2005, 5:52:34 AM
I seriously dont know why i did. Umm the stake part mean like a stake you stab people with :D

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:rose:"I'll spread my wings and i'll learn how to fly, i'll do what it takes till I touch the sky,and i'll make a wish, take a chance, make a change,and brake away"- Kelly Clarkson:rose:
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~d3viantpoet May 22, 2005, 6:07:24 AM
i understand stanza 4 (jaycech3n), but not "grab stake"

Otherwise, it's WONDERFUL! polish it up, & people will add this 2 their favourites
Overall Rating:6.5
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